Narrative Initial Plan

Film Premise

It follows the life of a young girl with a syndrome that we have created based off a variety of existing syndromes such as Alice In Wonderland, Capgrass and Cortard syndrome. It starts by appearing as a drama displaying the struggles that she has to go through living her every day life and how her syndrome affects her relationships with friends/ family. However as the film progresses it develops into the thriller/ horror genre as it is made clear to an audience that her brain is affected far worse than it first appears and her desire to harm those around her with limited remorse becomes increasingly evident.

First ActEverything appears niceA girl is shown doing normal daily activities

• Park with boyfriend/ friend, having a picnic? Playing catch?

• Breakfast with family

• School etc.

Slow editing speed, brightly lit high key shots with a large use of colourHappy but haunting music. Starts light and simplistic but becomes increasingly creepierPossibly have a female singing voice throughout the first act/ trailer? Singing Ring around the Rosies, sounds innocent at first but with creepy undertones.

Second Act
Things start to take a turn, quick flashes to display her trauma are intercut between happy moments, highlighted by changes in lighting and colour
Change in music, gets more intense with added drums
Scene of her telling her mum, "I don't know why I'm like this", can cut to dialogue as voice over
Start to hint at her not being okay mentally
Muttering to herself
Being evasive
Hinting her desire to hurt those around her
Start to show the cause, how she has undergone trauma at a young age, possibly from a split with her parents

Third Act
See a family member (Aunt talking to mum), the Aunt tells the mum "I think she's got something wrong". Mum defends girl to Aunt, tells her to back off, that she has no idea what is going on leads to family disputes
Editing speed increases, shots get a lot darker as they show how badly his mind is affecting her life, her quiet muttering to herself becomes yelling, she get's paranoid all the time, thinks everyone is staring at her and out to get her.
Mum finally realised something is wrong with her daughter from seeing her diary filled with thoughts of hate, cuts to girl walking into the room, carrying knife, then cut to black and voiceover of mum saying final line.

Shot List Second Draft

Here is the second draft of our shot list. We have added more shots into the first scene to make it more sinister and we have tweaked shots throughout the document to (hopefully!) finalise the shot list. Of course we will continue to alter this as we shoot.

Location and Property Breakdown

I have used Celtx again to create a location and prop breakdown. This is an easy to read breakdown of each scene, clearly displaying everything we need.

Act I Sound Testing

Here you can see the musical test composition for our first act - This is made of three tracks, the bass piano, piano melody, and flute. Originally this was just the two piano lines but the piece sounded empty inside. I added the flute to give it some character without detracting from what I'd already made.

Script Third Draft

Here is the third draft of our script, we changed the first scene to add in dialogue between EVE and NOAH hinting at the sinister to come with her seemingly innocently asking hi if he'll always love her.
We have also added an extra line of dialogue into scene two as we realised we have too many shots in our shot list to fit in with only the two previous lines. To make time for this we shortened some of the later dialogue in the film in scene 11, we hope now apart from very minor changes that are script is complete.

Target Audience

To help decide on our target audience I had a look on IMDB at the age demographics on people rating some of my similar media texts.

Here is the rating breakdown for Get Out


And here is the rating breakdown for Killing of a Sacred Deer


In both of these it can be seen that they are most enjoyed by a younger audience, this backs up what we thought from the results of our questionnaire, leading us to chose 15 - 20 years old for our target audience.

Script, Second Draft

Here is the second draft of our script - we have increased the size of the script, adding in both where our indents will go and replacing the 'Placeholder Scene' seen in the last version with an actual scene. We have also made other minor changes. We have also changed the placeholder name of the film to 'We all fall down', after the song 'ring around a rosie' which may or may not feature in the finished product.